Thursday, February 19, 2015

The Imperfect Union


The Imperfect Union

 I don’t know if it’s the blessings of fate
divine force or relentless drive, driving me to make
the tapestry of pulling strings that sing out our will
both seen and unseen, we are connected until
we try pulling the threads away, undoing our life
the filaments of the lineament of struggle and strife
but for every section of imperfection I try to undo
I find myself undone, losing connection to you
I am myself undone, losing connection to you
drifting along far-flung, unknown trajectory to
some new reality devoid of your color and sound
foundering and rudderless where happiness did abound
wondering if I could pay it forward, repair it with clues
to find your essence of timeline, mending my undressed blues
but for every section of imperfection I try to undo
I find myself undone, losing connection to you
I am myself undone, losing connection to you
I leave myself undone, choosing affection with you.

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Posted for dVerse - Twist and Shout – Meeting the Bar, where Björn has us sharpening up our Voltas. 

I skipped the sonnet form, opting for a free-write with emphasis on the sudden change of perspective, or Volta, which Björn challenged us to sharpen. (Well, I did my best, anyway.) :)

This poem was also written for the occasion of my ninth anniversary of being wed to a truly wonderful and insane woman, my Bookie. There are many things that I dislike about myself, but I find that if I perform the thought experiment of eliminating these unflattering things from my life, then in all likelihood, I never would've met Bookie. Life's funny sometimes. 

Go here to read the other dVerse poets who participated in this prompt.                                                          

14 comments:

  1. pretty cool refrain with just a slight change...i felt like the first refrain signaled the turn in your poem...it is interesting too...ha...the things that we might not like, but led us to where we are....yeah, i think i might err on the side of staying the same...happy anniversary barry...love the pic...

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  2. Happy anniversary to both of you ~ I specially admire that last line, choosing affection with you ~ I know this imperfect union, the tug & pull of emotions are well done ~

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  3. Good choice at the end, as the poem's repetitions establish the union is true however imperfect. I enjoyed this and also the dance which tells a little of the push pull of the relationship. Happy 8th!

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  4. I like this - a feel of form set free. You definitely made the turn while allowing the refrain to make the poem sing. Very creative, and shot through with truth. This really felt "real".

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  5. happy anniversary dude! this write has great flow to it... thought the slight turn was nice as well and it def is funny sometimes... I am a better person and have a great relationship with my best friend because we became close when I was dealing with some things I wasn't proud of... nice write man

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  6. Oh yes the turn with just a small change in the refrain changed the meaning totally... And all relationships have those struggles but at the end its only togerherness that counts.

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  7. Brilliant. I love that it's all one sentence. And the change at the end is a wonderful one.

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  8. Love this. The refrain(s) is the turn, each time more subtle. Wonderfully done. Thank you.

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  9. Happy Anniversary! This is a wonderful reply to the prompt and lovely present. I like the cracking Volta and how you made it your own.

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  10. i think it's often ourselves that suffer most under our imperfections and those that love us don't mind so much or even like them... a good reason to stay like you are..smiles... happy anniversary

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  11. Happy Anniversary...don't change anything:) OK well maybe some better dance videos ;)

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  12. ... marriage can be a beautiful thing and a lot of work... congrats

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  13. Happy anniversary to both of you! This is the great thing about love, the ones who love us can see beyond our imperfections and shortcomings and accept us as we are.

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  14. Congrats on your anniversary and this beautiful poem.

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