Thursday, October 16, 2014

Lovelace

Credit: Aurora over a Glacier Lagoon © James Woodend (U.K.)


Lovelace

lace swaddles my vision
looting her aurora

love smearing my judgment
left her tied in ribbons

lifted by emerald skies
longing for her rare air
loss gives way to wonder    
                             
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Written for dVerse: MeetingTheBar: Pleiades. This is a fun form. I'm glad I tried it. Go here to read other dVerse poets' Pleiades form. 

12 comments:

  1. Looting her aurora - a stunning line - I like how you worked with the metaphors here.

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  2. love smears judgement is cool

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  3. looting her aurora / left her tied in ribbons...lovelace indeed...

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  4. Cool video too. Bit of naughtiness in this metaphor.Looting her aurora, leaving her tied in ribbons *chuckles* but then again it could just be my wicked mind. As always delightful, clever and imaginative work.

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  5. Aurora, a marvel of nature and magical one too!

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  6. Such a clever use of the metaphor to describe what I imagine have been an intoxicating and love-laced experience ~ Love it Barry ~

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  7. heh your heavenly bodies under the heavenly bodies...nice creative slip in of lovelace as well....sounds like it could be fun...smiles.

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  8. I have always wanted to see the Northern Lights - nice

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  9. i was between nature and relationship... the power of the pen... always something more to a piece than meets the eye

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  10. I bit of a riddle, somewhat provocative....nice.

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