Saturday, July 19, 2014

this poem is a dream, a phantasm, and a note

dreaming

 

this poem is a dream, a phantasm, and a note

 
this poem is a dream dreamt by a dreamer
this poem is a phantasm fantasy of fleeting
this poem is a wind-swept love note
 
she comes cloaked in grey, informal metaphor
responding to questions of why and how
with grins and shrugs of just because
darting from the grip of understanding
lingering only to flirt with possibility
this poem is a dream dreamt by a dreamer
 
she coalesces into familiar, coveted prize
her smile takes form, the red in her lips
incites me to steal her shade for myself, but
gripping her waist loosens our linked dominion
our embrace tightens, dissolving in morning sun
this poem is a phantasm fantasy of fleeting
 
leaving a wake of winding words
that form constellations and galaxies
I read and incalculably live lifetimes of lovers
smiling, I release her from our dance
she rises on our thermal current
this poem is a wind-swept love note

this poem is a flirty dream, darting from my grasp
this poem is a phantasm, evaporating on fingertips
this poem is a love note, rising to meet our lovers
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This poem has been written for Sunday's Mini-Challenge: Boomerang Metaphors at imaginary garden with real toads.


This poem was also shared with my good friends at dVerse poets in honor of their weeklong celebration the site’s three year anniversary. As one of the first poetry communities I ever summoned the courage of contributing to, from the bottom of my heart, I thank you all for the encouragement, support, and most of all, our shared comradery and passion for poetry. Sorry I couldn’t participate in the festivities, but I’m honored to help clean-up the pub at the after-party.

Other dVerse poets have also participated in the after-party. Go here to read their well-crafted, inspiring poems.

21 comments:

  1. Hey, lovely form ~ I am still writing mine, smiles ~ I specially love this poem is a wind-swept love note ~ I think we are all leaving notes of all kinds behind ~

    Thanks for joining the celebration ~

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  2. a wind swept love note....smiles...those two middle stanzas where you personify the poem and give her movement...very cool piece barry...glad you joined in to close out the week....

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  3. like bri said, those two middle stanzas ruled; especially liked cloaked in grey, informal metaphor.. awesome write

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  4. There is truly a wind of love behind your words..and passion for life's free love that truly yes is FREE!

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  5. I love the progression of this, Barry and am thrilled to see the form coming to life in your words. My favorite section is where you go galactic...a favorite personal musing. Beautifully written thank you for joining the Real Toads challenge!

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  6. I really liked the second stanza..anything to do with dreams and I am there lost
    in the magic..

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  7. the poem is truly a love note to the elusive lady who only comes to a chosen few...& beautiful use of the form..

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  8. Excellent - and love is the common denominator that binds this formula and makes it work! Thank you.

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  9. Sigh ! You do have a way with windswept love notes Bizza. Just beautiful !

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  10. ah it is a love not - and so much more as well... love how poems develop a life of their own and are what we dream them to be

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  11. Wow! This is so beautiful - each stanza is a portal to imagination grounded in very real emotions. Thank you for sharing.

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  12. Awww, gorgeous, very romantic and very true!

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  13. I like the personification of the poem and also how you use alliteration. Nicely done.

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  14. Very nice form and concept - second stanza really lovely. Enjoyed this very much.

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  15. a unique take on the form... btw i love your "couple" picture... really cute! :)

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  16. How beautiful and romantic! I'm left breathless. :-)
    Thanks for visiting Poetry of the Netherworld.

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  17. I would mind winding words to form constellations or galaxies. This flows beautifully...the poem as a dream, a fantasy, a love note...just perfect.

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  18. This is beautifully romantic...words that elevate love, show its depth, it's total consuming..

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  19. So beautiful...love the flow and how it seems to take you to different realms of the poetic world. :)

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